Short Story Draft

I CAN"T DECIDE WHICH STORY IS BETTER SO THIS IS A SAMPLE OF BOTH

PLEASE COMMENT AND HELP ME CHOOSE. 

Hey my name is Agatha Jane Leonard's and I am a twenty eight year old woman. My hobbies include eating, listening to music, watching TV, and meeting people. (especially boys) I have one sister and 2 brothers who drive me crazy. Their names are Jean, Maxwell, and Bernard. I have no educational background, because I quit school at the age of six. My parents said I never paid attention, so there was no point. My boyfriend and I just broke up so I am really upset. I am so anxious to meet a new, better, and cuter guy just to aggravate Jason. My sister and brothers are already married. I just can't seem to settle down. It could be because of my height. I am 6''2. I think my height is unique; however, boys tend to run away from me. I can't  figure out why. Is it because of my personality? Or my hair? Or my teeth? I try to figure it out everyday. I have no friends, which is fine because I keep myself great company. Recently I made a "friend'' at the grocery store. I was this little white puppy that was sick. I fed it and it ''smiled' at me. 

I should probably let you all know that my name is Alison. Alison Casey. I am a fourteen year old girl who attends Bradley Hight School. So far this year has been rough.  I was dating this guy named John. He was so great. He had the perfect smile, prettiest eyes, and cutest laugh. He always was a gentleman to me. He first asked me out November 14, 2010. That was a really good day for me. About six months passed and we were so happy together. My cousin told me that John didn't like me anymore. I was devastated. I didn't understand why. I tried to do everything right. I always was nice to him and made him laugh...etc. As my immature self I called John and broke up with him before he did it to me. Soon after the break up I realized that I regretted my choice majorly. I really liked John, in fact I might even have loved him. In a panic I called back, but he didn't answer. I was clueless. Maybe my cousin was right. Maybe John found a better girl, that was prettier and nicer. I decided to wait it out. I thought for sure he would call me back and forgive my stupidity. Two days later, no calls or texts. Those days felt likes years. It was 8:00 and I was bored so I decided to give him a call. A ''friendly'' call. Just before I click call, I received a message. The message was from my best friend. She was telling me that John has a new girlfriend. Already? I was furious. I immediately called my friend. "Hey omg who is john dating?", I asked in a panic. "Alison I don't know how else to say this, but he is dating your cousin."